Review Detail of El_Tobi0999 in The Second Coming of Gluttony, the First of Vainglory
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I am a little disappointed with this fanfic. Since everyone was praising it, I thought it would be great. At first, it was going well, but when he entered the tutorial event he was thinking of not standing out because he was getting observed. The action alone destroyed my hope in this fanfic. Also, so far the only change I have seen is improving himself and his family relationship. I would read further to see if fanfic changes.
The Second Coming of Gluttony, the First of Vainglory
HappyVainGlory
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Thanks for giving the story a chance and taking the time to leave a review! I'll be the first to admit that a good chunk of the story can be boring and cling too close to canon. That's mostly because the story was writing practice to try and see how and why things worked in SCOG. I eventually figured things out and learned how plot works, but that's a good chunk later around the half way point in the story I think. Still, a lot of people seemed to enjoy it regardless, so I decided to put it up here for those types of people who would enjoy the story as rough as it is. If I rewrote it, I personally would change things up from meeting Kim Hannah the first time, but that's, uh, kind of a lot to rewrite, so here we are. Thanks again for reading and leaving your honest review! I appreciate you!
Sorry for being a little aggressive on this review. Is just my PTSD of cultivation novels. I just read countless cultivations novels where the mc hides his powers because he getting observed by elders. But you got good beginning expected the young master part.
HappyVainGlory:Thanks for giving the story a chance and taking the time to leave a review! I'll be the first to admit that a good chunk of the story can be boring and cling too close to canon. That's mostly because the story was writing practice to try and see how and why things worked in SCOG. I eventually figured things out and learned how plot works, but that's a good chunk later around the half way point in the story I think. Still, a lot of people seemed to enjoy it regardless, so I decided to put it up here for those types of people who would enjoy the story as rough as it is. If I rewrote it, I personally would change things up from meeting Kim Hannah the first time, but that's, uh, kind of a lot to rewrite, so here we are. Thanks again for reading and leaving your honest review! I appreciate you!
Lordmoonlight:bruh keep reading you won't be disappointed he was weak at the start that's why but rn he's just great he still have problems as a normal person would have but it's all good
HappyVainGlory:Thanks for giving the story a chance and taking the time to leave a review! I'll be the first to admit that a good chunk of the story can be boring and cling too close to canon. That's mostly because the story was writing practice to try and see how and why things worked in SCOG. I eventually figured things out and learned how plot works, but that's a good chunk later around the half way point in the story I think. Still, a lot of people seemed to enjoy it regardless, so I decided to put it up here for those types of people who would enjoy the story as rough as it is. If I rewrote it, I personally would change things up from meeting Kim Hannah the first time, but that's, uh, kind of a lot to rewrite, so here we are. Thanks again for reading and leaving your honest review! I appreciate you!