I see alot of the same in your novel as well the story is phenomenal but the spacing and writing quality hold it back slightly. I would suggest reading some authors books who have a similar pace and working from there. and adding a prologue chapter of an event to pull reader in.. keep it up
Stormzz
Liked it!
LIKEthe spacing is to large it makes the writing choppy in my opinion and it stops the reader from flowing from one part to the other
Stormzz:Thanks for checking it out. Do you mind expanding on what you mean by spacing and writing quality?