Oh lord bless this author, for have a made a fic other than konoha. Anyways time for ratings. Writing 4.5 ( decent. a few and grammar errors here and there but I don’t mind it since it’s a different a village, and… god bless, no f^ing system) Story 4 ( it’s alright, a good start. His ambitions of becoming one of mist swordsman and making himself known in the third shinobi war. Anyways it’s the story is solid) Though author you did not mention the MC appearance. I had trouble picturing him until I just generated a random person in my head. If you plan on describing his features, just don’t add too much detail otherwise others won’t follow up. I’m fine with excessive detail which will help imagine the character’s features better. You can add a picture of how the character looks which will definitely help. Oh also, I recommend you to keep long paragraphs short so the reader won’t lose interest. I noticed this on the second chapter. And about the updates, hmmm I don’t know. Though I don’t mind it taking a while since I’m mostly busy. I often log out from this account for about 4 to 5 months and let the other slow fics update. Anyways this is me, I don’t mind long updates but I don’t know about the others.
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LIKEUra_Chan:This feedback means so much to me and i will try to update more frequently since i am in holidays and thank you again for this feedback i will take this to heart :)