Review Detail of Insane_Pumpkin in NOT HARRY POTTER AND THE SYSTEM

Not a bad idea, though a system in HP world is so problematic that it's not worth it most of the time. Either you mess up something or you keep things so vague that system is barerly mentioned. At least you didn't use lvls, that would be a tragedy. I read about 9ch and i can allready see that it's a mess, you need a editor or someone that can go through problems with grammar and logic. Some sentences lack words and the entire visit to goblins was wierd. Not mentioning lack of reaction to a horcrux from the goblin who gave him a test.