Review Detail of Taoist_Azure_Sword in White Online
Review detail
I was scrolling through new novels and found this novel. I like vr novel so I decided to read this. My first thing to compliment is the writing quality. 5/5 no grammar mistakes, fight scenes are not long. The world building is pretty good as more and more info are given. Keep it up author
White Online
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Damn right. People write whole articles about frogs with a slightly different tongue. I write ”essays” about grammar mistakes in otherwise interesting webnovels. We all have a finite amount of time in this world. What we spend it on should be important. To me, this is important, as the author surely believes their story is. To you, perhaps ridiculing others about how they spend their time is important. No one knows but you! P.S. The first chapter has more than one grammar mistake. I actually couldn’t find a whole paragraph without one. Lol.
bubilicious_king:Ain’t no way you just typed a whole essay on a grammar mistake. Bet you were crying while writing that.
Dude I don’t think we’re reading the same novel. The very first sentence is structured wrong, and has a grammar issue. “World’s first, highly anticipated VRMMORPG White Online is going to the sale tomorrow!” Why is there a comma after first? There’s no second comma, so it isn’t a pause for effect, nor is it an explanation comma. If you were going to put a comma anywhere in that sentence, put it after VRMMORPG, as you’re explaining the first VRMMORPG is White Online. And don’t get me started on “…going to the sale tomorrow!”. What even is that?!? Is the sale a place and White Online a person, like saying, “Tom is going to the office tomorrow!”? Again, are we reading the same novel? (Btw, there is way more glaring grammar issues, it’s just funny to me that the literal first sentence you read has multiple. Lol)
TheSIothKing:Dude I don’t think we’re reading the same novel. The very first sentence is structured wrong, and has a grammar issue. “World’s first, highly anticipated VRMMORPG White Online is going to the sale tomorrow!” Why is there a comma after first? There’s no second comma, so it isn’t a pause for effect, nor is it an explanation comma. If you were going to put a comma anywhere in that sentence, put it after VRMMORPG, as you’re explaining the first VRMMORPG is White Online. And don’t get me started on “…going to the sale tomorrow!”. What even is that?!? Is the sale a place and White Online a person, like saying, “Tom is going to the office tomorrow!”? Again, are we reading the same novel? (Btw, there is way more glaring grammar issues, it’s just funny to me that the literal first sentence you read has multiple. Lol)
Read the latest chapter, same issues persist. For those that are able to read and ignore the grammatical issues . Enjoy .
OneFellSnow:Cannot say that I agree. Numerous sentence structure issues and mixing tenses(past, present). I only read 5 chapters and did not see an improvement. Needs proof reading and editing before posting. Will check out one the latest chapters to see if there are improvements before deciding to read.
KhingPilot:Seems you have much issues in life. Loosen up and get some fun.
Ain’t no way you just typed a whole essay on a grammar mistake. Bet you were crying while writing that.
TheSIothKing:Dude I don’t think we’re reading the same novel. The very first sentence is structured wrong, and has a grammar issue. “World’s first, highly anticipated VRMMORPG White Online is going to the sale tomorrow!” Why is there a comma after first? There’s no second comma, so it isn’t a pause for effect, nor is it an explanation comma. If you were going to put a comma anywhere in that sentence, put it after VRMMORPG, as you’re explaining the first VRMMORPG is White Online. And don’t get me started on “…going to the sale tomorrow!”. What even is that?!? Is the sale a place and White Online a person, like saying, “Tom is going to the office tomorrow!”? Again, are we reading the same novel? (Btw, there is way more glaring grammar issues, it’s just funny to me that the literal first sentence you read has multiple. Lol)
I'm so used to reading mtl now that I ignore all instances of bad grammar, or I would have gone insane by now
Daoist_Ra1n_:You all need to read some MTL. 😑
TheSIothKing:Dude I don’t think we’re reading the same novel. The very first sentence is structured wrong, and has a grammar issue. “World’s first, highly anticipated VRMMORPG White Online is going to the sale tomorrow!” Why is there a comma after first? There’s no second comma, so it isn’t a pause for effect, nor is it an explanation comma. If you were going to put a comma anywhere in that sentence, put it after VRMMORPG, as you’re explaining the first VRMMORPG is White Online. And don’t get me started on “…going to the sale tomorrow!”. What even is that?!? Is the sale a place and White Online a person, like saying, “Tom is going to the office tomorrow!”? Again, are we reading the same novel? (Btw, there is way more glaring grammar issues, it’s just funny to me that the literal first sentence you read has multiple. Lol)
Gummybear912:I'm so used to reading mtl now that I ignore all instances of bad grammar, or I would have gone insane by now
