Review Detail of Juice_9768 in Togabito’s Second Chance

It was pretty good. The idea is really great and has a lot of potential. I think it could be very good, but the writing quality butchers it imo. I think like 90% of the sentences start with a verb that ends with “-ing” and most sentences aren’t really complete. Because of the misplaced periods and sentence structure, it reads kind of awkwardly. This can sort of be ignored for the most part, but during actions scenes, it ruins the flow of the story. Other than that, it’s pretty solid.