Review Detail of LastGod in Twilight: Omega

I think this is a decent fanfic. But it def could have been better. The good points are the story and the MC they are cool and i like their character. The main problem is the finer points. The two big ones are the romance between the MC and his girl seeming to be very weak and thin feeling like there was no real relationship there just a cordiality that included kissing. The other week point is the character dialog not being enough to make you care about the characters. The MC seem mostly fleshed out but the other characters didn't seem to have as solid a foundation or they were not given enough time or dialog for us to understand their character. Another good point thought was the action that really was awesome and kept you entertain all in all it was a decent read.