Review Detail of Spelloyal in Starting as a Jumper on Marvel Multiverse

It seems to be a translation of a Chinese fanfic, I can't be sure without the author confirming it because it's well translated. Unfortunately the characters seem to act based on Chinese society, even in the US, other than that the symbol used for lines (eg 'speech') is commonly used for thoughts in most novels/fanfics and this makes everything a little weird. Writing isn't very natural either. The story isn't engaging and doesn't feel realistic to read. It feels kind of artificial (it's hard to describe the feeling) it's not a quality issue but a writing style issue.