It is hard to read, mc has low iq. Worst part the story feels like the dairy of an old person whose life was uneventful. Now the part where the villain comes has zero energy, really feels like lazy writing. Cause why didnt the shadow take over the mcs sisters body instead? You don’t have to always tell us when the mc sleeps and eats. Focus on the plot. The slow build up will only make sense if you weren’t trying to make this fast paced.
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