Review Detail of MegaMacho in Percy Jackson and the Hard-Working Mortal

This book is overall fine. But there are key things that just making reading this a pain. 1. Don't use (...) every single sentence. Nobody does that, and for a reason. Its ugly to look at, and gives a lethargic feeling for the experience. Use it very, very rarely, or none at all. 2. The character reactions, motivations, etc... could use some work. He is lackluster. You don't have to make him mighty, just interesting. The rest can follow this.