Review Detail of EternalTaoist in Naruto Time-Control

The main character has the ability to control time. At the beginning, his ability to control time was small but little and little he would be able to improve. He would later go to several other worlds after finishing his journey in the Naruto world. This is machine translation with edits. I'm doing this to improve my editing and proof reading skills. Please kindly point out any mistakes that I make. Thank you.