Okay so there is a boatload of potential here. And not much else. The two main areas it suffers is dialogue and general progression. Character interactions are just clunky and awkward and emotions are sorta all over the place. Story progression is awful and rushed. 15 years in 20 odd chapters which makes all these characters who are supposedly important to the MC just one dimensional awkward filler. You’ll notice anyone of any significance in any Way to the MC is killed off, side lined, or a convoluted plot progressor that ends up not making any sense if given more than a millisecond of thought because the author made the MC a litteral god. Potential; not much else.
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