Review Detail of WM_Dizy in Invincible's: SUPERMAN

Item: Invincible's: SUPERMAN
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WM_DizyLv152yrWM_Dizy

The grammer is unreadable and the dialogue feels unnatural. SkipSkipSkipSkipSkipSkipSkipSkupSkupllllllll lijkt of you hij of hoog got got got go go ok go go go oh hi

Invincible's: SUPERMAN

Thomas_Hodge

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Thomas_HodgeAuthorThomas_Hodge

thank you very much for your input I will try to improve on this for you? anything g else you can say can will help with future chapters.

2yr

WM_DizyLv15WM_Dizy

I would recommend using paragraphs and quotation marks.

Thomas_Hodge:thank you very much for your input I will try to improve on this for you? anything g else you can say can will help with future chapters.

2yr

Thomas_HodgeAuthorThomas_Hodge

Thank you very much for the advice I put out another chapter using advice from the comments please tell me any other changes that would make reading more enjoyable.

WM_Dizy:I would recommend using paragraphs and quotation marks.

2yr

Konrad_The_FourthLv4Konrad_The_Fourth

Why anissa? Isn't she the one who raped mark?

Thomas_Hodge:Thank you very much for the advice I put out another chapter using advice from the comments please tell me any other changes that would make reading more enjoyable.

2yr

Thomas_HodgeAuthorThomas_Hodge

yes originally, but after the first season I planned on deviating from the original plot line stay tuned I promise you'll enjoy what I have planned

Konrad_The_Fourth:Why anissa? Isn't she the one who raped mark?

2yr

6BigBoneMeat9Lv146BigBoneMeat9

Is she going to r*pe superman

Thomas_Hodge:yes originally, but after the first season I planned on deviating from the original plot line stay tuned I promise you'll enjoy what I have planned

1yr