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Frankly, I loved your story, but because the chapters have a lot of stretching and stuffing, I didn't enjoy it much because I reached the paid chapters and I don't have any money (All I wanted to say is not to make your chapters too much and too much stretching because you will lose viewers quickly and I advise you to edit the first 30 chapters, as You give so many side characters so much time that you tell us about their useless interactions in the story you just have to take care of the mc's progress until he meets them then you can talk about them, but just in one chapter) and please don't make it romantic or harem I hope you understand my english😅😂
GREED: ALL FOR WHAT?
DMadLord
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I was half way reading and all was fine until you recommended "the abyssal Lord of the magus world " for the power system and i was like : " really ?! " 😑 then came to the part where " but everything else is bad." and it killed me broo 😂. honestly it was going alright until the whole veganza arc came in. and the worst is that they just separated without doing anything significant. like the whole event was without a purpose.
heavenly_demon000:I noticed that your chapters have improved, but there are still some stretches, it looks like your novel will be one of the best novels someday, if you want some ideas about bloodlines, strength and laws... I recommend you read " abyssal lord of the magic world " because I liked the path of strength in it a lot, but everything else bad. I hope your story is much better than it.🔥🔥
I understand your English lol. Thanks for the feedback. I appreciate that you took your time to write this. I understand your feelings of frustration about the side characters. I assure you that it is not useless and won't be a waste. A story has more than two sides to it. All side characters are important. Keep Reading to find out.
I noticed that your chapters have improved, but there are still some stretches, it looks like your novel will be one of the best novels someday, if you want some ideas about bloodlines, strength and laws... I recommend you read " abyssal lord of the magic world " because I liked the path of strength in it a lot, but everything else bad. I hope your story is much better than it.🔥🔥
DMadLord:I understand your English lol. Thanks for the feedback. I appreciate that you took your time to write this. I understand your feelings of frustration about the side characters. I assure you that it is not useless and won't be a waste. A story has more than two sides to it. All side characters are important. Keep Reading to find out.
heavenly_demon000:I noticed that your chapters have improved, but there are still some stretches, it looks like your novel will be one of the best novels someday, if you want some ideas about bloodlines, strength and laws... I recommend you read " abyssal lord of the magic world " because I liked the path of strength in it a lot, but everything else bad. I hope your story is much better than it.🔥🔥
heavenly_demon000:Do you want the truth or lies?? Although the truth is a little harch
you can tell me your harsh truth now or wait and update your knowledge before you tell me your harsh truth. I was hoping for your recent opinion since the volume is about to end.
heavenly_demon000:about 600
You should know that I consider your novel to be my best novel. Therefore, if you see any criticism from me, it is only because I want to make it the best and not have an equal. But you still have the problem of explaining things more than measuring them and re-explaining them over and over to the point where we find the chapters so few, I think you do it unconsciously, if you just ignore some of the explanation it would be better. That's all I have, and I hope you don't take my words in a negative way but take them in a positive way. And thank you for the best novel in existence.
DMadLord:you can tell me your harsh truth now or wait and update your knowledge before you tell me your harsh truth. I was hoping for your recent opinion since the volume is about to end.
Lol. you should know that you are one of my favorite fans too and I do appreciate the criticism. you are right that I over explain some times. I do it unconsciously and not because I want to stretch the chapters. update yourself on GREED and tell me what you think of it. thank you for the feedback.
heavenly_demon000:You should know that I consider your novel to be my best novel. Therefore, if you see any criticism from me, it is only because I want to make it the best and not have an equal. But you still have the problem of explaining things more than measuring them and re-explaining them over and over to the point where we find the chapters so few, I think you do it unconsciously, if you just ignore some of the explanation it would be better. That's all I have, and I hope you don't take my words in a negative way but take them in a positive way. And thank you for the best novel in existence.
Since we are human, then I believe that there will be a human among Legion. And humans are known for their ability to adapt, harmonize, and evolve with anything, and this power is called flow. How about you make a human Legion have this power. Or, he could cultivate a universe within his Dantian. With what Legion comprehended true laws and concepts, and with the power of singularity he obtained, he would have a true universe within him, and this would help him break through the laws of the universe again. What is your opinion??
DMadLord:Lol. you should know that you are one of my favorite fans too and I do appreciate the criticism. you are right that I over explain some times. I do it unconsciously and not because I want to stretch the chapters. update yourself on GREED and tell me what you think of it. thank you for the feedback.
Lol. humans are weak. forget the ability to adapt and evolve. every sentient race in the void universe has that ability. there's nothing special about humans. or do you honestly want to tell me that if you could be any race you will choose to be human?
heavenly_demon000:Since we are human, then I believe that there will be a human among Legion. And humans are known for their ability to adapt, harmonize, and evolve with anything, and this power is called flow. How about you make a human Legion have this power. Or, he could cultivate a universe within his Dantian. With what Legion comprehended true laws and concepts, and with the power of singularity he obtained, he would have a true universe within him, and this would help him break through the laws of the universe again. What is your opinion??
You are talking about the current humans, but I am talking about the ancient humans. I am talking about the original humans, about the first humans. They were the rulers of everything and they adapted and evolved in a short period of time, which indicates that humans have the strongest capabilities in terms of adaptation and evolution. It is just that Our bloodline is weakening with the passage of time. Nothing is useless, it's just about how you use it.
DMadLord:Lol. humans are weak. forget the ability to adapt and evolve. every sentient race in the void universe has that ability. there's nothing special about humans. or do you honestly want to tell me that if you could be any race you will choose to be human?
ancient humans or not, would you rather be an ancient human or some other race?my point is that there is a buttload of choices out there, there is no need to chose a boring one.
heavenly_demon000:You are talking about the current humans, but I am talking about the ancient humans. I am talking about the original humans, about the first humans. They were the rulers of everything and they adapted and evolved in a short period of time, which indicates that humans have the strongest capabilities in terms of adaptation and evolution. It is just that Our bloodline is weakening with the passage of time. Nothing is useless, it's just about how you use it.
I want to be the origin of all humans. And I don't care much if he's human or not, what's important is the abilities I told you about, especially the creation of a real universe inside him. What do you think??🤔
DMadLord:ancient humans or not, would you rather be an ancient human or some other race?my point is that there is a buttload of choices out there, there is no need to chose a boring one.
any one on the path of perfection can create worlds inside them. they are world gods. humans are not special in that way. but I understand that you want to see a human. I personally don't think much of humanity. but I understand the allure of a better human
heavenly_demon000:I want to be the origin of all humans. And I don't care much if he's human or not, what's important is the abilities I told you about, especially the creation of a real universe inside him. What do you think??🤔
In the hands of the Legion, humans can become the pinnacle of the universe, and this is what I want to see. I want to see Legion develop a "useless" human on the path of perfection to stand at the pinnacle. With your ideas and imagination, I believe you can work miracles in your novel. I am just giving some of my thoughts and it is your choice if you want to add them to the novel. Thank you for your understanding and for me it will always remain the best novel. If you want some ideas, I can suggest some.🙏😂😂
DMadLord:any one on the path of perfection can create worlds inside them. they are world gods. humans are not special in that way. but I understand that you want to see a human. I personally don't think much of humanity. but I understand the allure of a better human
I want ideas man. I am about to start another volume and I could do with some suggestions for a race. I already have the race for Legion's clones figured out so I want an interesting race to be Legion's enemy. thank you. I'll be waiting
heavenly_demon000:In the hands of the Legion, humans can become the pinnacle of the universe, and this is what I want to see. I want to see Legion develop a "useless" human on the path of perfection to stand at the pinnacle. With your ideas and imagination, I believe you can work miracles in your novel. I am just giving some of my thoughts and it is your choice if you want to add them to the novel. Thank you for your understanding and for me it will always remain the best novel. If you want some ideas, I can suggest some.🙏😂😂
Since there is a Legion demon then there will be an Angel Legion, or it could be a Cthulhu, spirit, ogre, zerg... But for me there is one race that has no narrative, and that is "abnormalities, errors" horrible beings the universe will do anything to erase from Existence, it would be best to make a Legion with this race
DMadLord:I want ideas man. I am about to start another volume and I could do with some suggestions for a race. I already have the race for Legion's clones figured out so I want an interesting race to be Legion's enemy. thank you. I'll be waiting
heavenly_demon000:Since there is a Legion demon then there will be an Angel Legion, or it could be a Cthulhu, spirit, ogre, zerg... But for me there is one race that has no narrative, and that is "abnormalities, errors" horrible beings the universe will do anything to erase from Existence, it would be best to make a Legion with this race