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It's pretty good for a closeted 15-year-old, such as yourself to write, cousin. You need to fix your grammar a bit, the story has a lot of potential, and I recommend focusing a bit more on world-building. I also made this account just to watch over your progress, and yes I promise not to out you, I know how homophobic your parents can be. I hope you continue improving.