Review Detail of Vymlock in Archived #1
Review detail
Unlike the others I have no problems with how the MC modified the basic "parameters" of the world of Hotd always believed that it is this close to an Hentai anime that embracing the sub genre completely would even do it good,the elimination of the the male characters that starred on the series right from the start was not a move many of us can complain about really perphaps for some Netori but given Rei's story is a mess better to let her be the MC's childhood friend and be done with it. The inclusion of chackra and Naruto elements indeed the story could do without and mainly when I reached the chapters practically skipped them cause beyond scenes with the goddess(she is a majorly irrelevant,the story could have excluded her and things wouldn't have changed much) there was nothing substantial there,the MC could have dealt with the monsters anyways no need to make an easy mode story mode even easier. Another matter I disliked were the timeskip as for once developing the character's childhood at least more benefits all,specially when this is a Hentai universe and we could have even more Shota scenes,another matter is developing to the reader's eye the relationship with Rei on a more genuine way,more scenes with the mother and with this world being an hentai one you could have even made the father marry a second foreign wife giving the MC an extra older beauty for his harem. Then the 4 years timeskip came also too fast and you barely explored the start of teenage years for our guy going straight for the day the zombie's attacked,not even the high school life before that moment the harem could have already been consolidated(with lewd moments with Rei,Saeko,introducing Miku and the other girls that you will probably ignore) more officially way before the world changed forever with the epidemic. A fanfic always has lots of potential but mainly because poor board decisions it is majorly washed away... Still I want to believe that the story moving forward will eh be more unique and that you'll keep using flashbacks to remember moments of the MC's and the Girl's pasts even when that way of experiencing those is worse than living them first hand but oh well.
Archived #1
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Of course you were owed an educated and civilised response at the very least. Honestly? I would try creating an original setting similar to HOTD but with its own peculiarities,it is a vastly exploited scenario and putting/honing your talents as a writers with your own content is always far better than keep toying with overwatched animes. Nevertheless no matter what you decide,proops to you for actually reading the reviews and learning from them like a good writer should.
That1BoredWriter:I love this review! You took time out of your day to tell me what you thought about the story in a non-hostile way and I appreciate your truthful explanation. With that out of the way, I've acknowledged a lot of the things that seem unnecessary in the story like the chakra implementation. I've stepped away from this story because... 1. My reason for creating this story was because of boredom and curiosity. This story was not meant to be taken seriously in any way because I worked on it as a way to pass the time and give me something to do, as well as to provide entertainment for others that shared the same boredom I felt. 2. I have a life. Outside of Webnovel, I have a family and things that are required of me, which I have no choice but to adhere to. Unfortunately, the feeling of being away from the story for so long also decreased my interest in writing because I kept finding other things to do. That being said, I'm deciding what to do with this story. There are currently three options on the table: 1. Abandon the story, left to be forgotten. 2. Rewrite the story. Tweak certain aspects and remove unnecessary rubbish to improve the flow. 3. Make a different story, albeit with a possibly similar concept. I'm hovering over the second and third right now, but mostly the former option. I've completely disregarded the first one because the thought of just leaving this story made me uncomfortable. Thank you for the great review.
I love this review! You took time out of your day to tell me what you thought about the story in a non-hostile way and I appreciate your truthful explanation. With that out of the way, I've acknowledged a lot of the things that seem unnecessary in the story like the chakra implementation. I've stepped away from this story because... 1. My reason for creating this story was because of boredom and curiosity. This story was not meant to be taken seriously in any way because I worked on it as a way to pass the time and give me something to do, as well as to provide entertainment for others that shared the same boredom I felt. 2. I have a life. Outside of Webnovel, I have a family and things that are required of me, which I have no choice but to adhere to. Unfortunately, the feeling of being away from the story for so long also decreased my interest in writing because I kept finding other things to do. That being said, I'm deciding what to do with this story. There are currently three options on the table: 1. Abandon the story, left to be forgotten. 2. Rewrite the story. Tweak certain aspects and remove unnecessary rubbish to improve the flow. 3. Make a different story, albeit with a possibly similar concept. I'm hovering over the second and third right now, but mostly the former option. I've completely disregarded the first one because the thought of just leaving this story made me uncomfortable. Thank you for the great review.
Vymlock:Of course you were owed an educated and civilised response at the very least. Honestly? I would try creating an original setting similar to HOTD but with its own peculiarities,it is a vastly exploited scenario and putting/honing your talents as a writers with your own content is always far better than keep toying with overwatched animes. Nevertheless no matter what you decide,proops to you for actually reading the reviews and learning from them like a good writer should.