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WorthyAdversary
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After about two months of searching, I finally found one more novel that I can confidently say I'll be waiting for in agony for each and every chapter after finishing the previous one. First off is writing quality, which I give 4 stars. It's pretty obvious why, with it being a direct translation of the author's Turkish version of the story, and you can see that, although the spelling is absolutely perfect, the grammar is weird in some parts and just wrong in some other parts, but these mistakes are isolated to one or two per chapter, and so it doesn't really affect the reading flow, hence the 4 stars. Secondly is the stability of updates which I obviously gave 5 stars. Pretty self-explanatory if you look at the update rate. Thirdly is the story development, which I had to give 3 stars. It was either I gave this 3 stars or the character design three stars, but I eventually decided on this. This is solely because of the development of the relationships between the MC and the supporting cast. It feels horribly forced, cringy, and even just "skip the entire chapter" material at times. I actually almost dropped this novel when I read the chapter when the MC talks to his "sister" for the first time, cause it was in the first few chapters of the story, was actually over the phone through text whilst still managing to be extremely cringy, and I truly thought that the rest of the novel would be just as trashy once I read that interaction. The development of the relationship between the MC and the MC of the game he transmigrated into was even worse. Here's the "but" that all y'all have been waiting for though: the start of the relationships might have been utter trash, but the developments afterward truly feel real, and made me feel emotional at times. And so, if you can get past the start of the relationships (I just completely erased them from my mind at this point and inserted generic plot development) you'll be in for a real treat I believe, as you'll actually be emotionally invested in these characters at some point. The rest of the actual story development was pretty good, with nothing special about it, but nothing bad about it either, so yeah, that's my spiel on the story development. Now, onto the character design, which I gave 4 stars. It's pretty generic to be honest, like the actual story development, there really doesn't seem to be anything new or truly mindblowing. All the characters have believable backgrounds, and some backgrounds are still shrouded in mystery. Although, one thing, because of one's investment in the character after one point, and how the author has created situations in which the MC has interacted with all female characters to a certain extent, there will probably be pretty strong opinions in the future when one FL pulls ahead of the others. So, unless this novel will include a harem (which I am not advocating for in any way cause I am strictly in the no harem gang), there will inevitably be some mad people when one heroine eventually wins. Finally, there's the world background, which once again, is pretty generic, with nothing special about it, and so it's another 4 stars. The synopsis is all you need in order to be able to guess the entirety of the world's background and power system, as long as you've read other novels within this genre of course. Overall, the story scratched the itch I had for another story where the MC knows the future, kinda, and so that's why it'll be one of the novels I'll be closely following. It's a great novel, and, as long as the story follows that path that it's been trudging on right now, then I truly believe that it'll be something special on this platform ("special" meaning not a trashy harem, lust fulfillment novel for virgin, middle-aged men). Keep it up author, you're doing a great job with this novel!

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WorthyAdversary
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Lol

ItzNeedless:Yes, I have read your novels so I kinda already had an idea...
WindskyW
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First of all, thank you for writing a full review. You pointed out my mistakes well, I couldn't help but agree with the first interactions of the characters. I would say things are a bit different for Clara, there's something about why their relationship develops so fast, there's even foreshadowing in that chapter. But the things with the other characters are completely my own incompetence, and so is the cringe thing xD. I'll be more careful with the characters I write in the future. I'm actually thinking of rewriting the first chapters in the future when I finish the novel or take a long break or something, it's going to take a while, but I'll definitely take what you say seriously. Thanks again for the criticism :) Also, there will be no harem, you can be sure of that.

WorthyAdversary
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Thank god... for both the fact that the novel won't be a harem and the fact that you'll be rewriting some chapters. Two questions though, will you be pay-walling your chapters sometime in the future? And, could you post the link to the Turkish version?

WindskyW:First of all, thank you for writing a full review. You pointed out my mistakes well, I couldn't help but agree with the first interactions of the characters. I would say things are a bit different for Clara, there's something about why their relationship develops so fast, there's even foreshadowing in that chapter. But the things with the other characters are completely my own incompetence, and so is the cringe thing xD. I'll be more careful with the characters I write in the future. I'm actually thinking of rewriting the first chapters in the future when I finish the novel or take a long break or something, it's going to take a while, but I'll definitely take what you say seriously. Thanks again for the criticism :) Also, there will be no harem, you can be sure of that.
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ItzNeedless
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About the romance, it feels to me like Celine would be a good friend and/or partner for Aiden. If you ask me, Aiden would end up with either Lucia or Sue, although I hope Lucia wins(I just like her more for some reason despite her not being shown much)

Blue_Pizza
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I actually wish Sue is the FL more than Lucia XD. As of the available chapters, she's the female character who has the most interactions with Aiden, and their relationship has the potential to undergo some amazing development, especially considering how it started. Also, it's kinda tiring to read romances where MC ends up with the prettiest girl in the OG story no matter what. Can't "normal" extras fall in love with each other?

ItzNeedless
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Well, based on the development so far, I would say that Sue is prolly gonna win. She is the character Aiden has interacted with the most and everyone likes a FMC with a tragic past.

Blue_Pizza:I actually wish Sue is the FL more than Lucia XD. As of the available chapters, she's the female character who has the most interactions with Aiden, and their relationship has the potential to undergo some amazing development, especially considering how it started. Also, it's kinda tiring to read romances where MC ends up with the prettiest girl in the OG story no matter what. Can't "normal" extras fall in love with each other?
WorthyAdversary
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Ngl, I disagree with either opinion. But seeing how there are already three opinions on who the FL will be, well, that just proves my point.

Blue_Pizza:I actually wish Sue is the FL more than Lucia XD. As of the available chapters, she's the female character who has the most interactions with Aiden, and their relationship has the potential to undergo some amazing development, especially considering how it started. Also, it's kinda tiring to read romances where MC ends up with the prettiest girl in the OG story no matter what. Can't "normal" extras fall in love with each other?
WorthyAdversary
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Yeah, I pretty much agree with you seeing how the novel's going, although I'm not rooting for the same FL as you or any of the one's you've mentioned for that matter.

ItzNeedless:About the romance, it feels to me like Celine would be a good friend and/or partner for Aiden. If you ask me, Aiden would end up with either Lucia or Sue, although I hope Lucia wins(I just like her more for some reason despite her not being shown much)
ItzNeedless
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wait, wait... you are not rooting for Clara are you?

WorthyAdversary:Yeah, I pretty much agree with you seeing how the novel's going, although I'm not rooting for the same FL as you or any of the one's you've mentioned for that matter.
Blue_Pizza
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omg that's a horrifying thought

ItzNeedless:wait, wait... you are not rooting for Clara are you?
WorthyAdversary
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...I mean, just go read my own novels and see for yourself man. (Definitely not self promoting here.)

ItzNeedless:wait, wait... you are not rooting for Clara are you?
WorthyAdversary
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And I have no idea what you're talking about.

ItzNeedless:wait, wait... you are not rooting for Clara are you?
ItzNeedless
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Yes, I have read your novels so I kinda already had an idea...

WorthyAdversary:...I mean, just go read my own novels and see for yourself man. (Definitely not self promoting here.)
WindskyW
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Oh God... no no no... That's not going to happen...

ItzNeedless:wait, wait... you are not rooting for Clara are you?
ItzNeedless
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That's what the anime community said about Aqua X Ruby ship for oshi no ko... we all know how that ended

WindskyW:Oh God... no no no... That's not going to happen...
zagnar
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About the romance, do we know who the FL is?