Review Detail of DolanTramp in What? I been Isekai'd With A Cliche Anime System!?
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This novel is about someone isekai´d.. Well the writing quality is good and there are 3 chapters on the first day so the stability of updates is up to be seen. The story is .. how should i say it.. weird? As mentioned its about someone isekai´d with a goldfinger but hes out of touch with reality. He transmigrated and is like "wow awesome", not caring about his family. Is in a new body and thinks what? Nothing only being confused what the cause of his transmigration is. Receives the owners memories, mentions of abuse and indirect killing for being average and what happens? Nothing despite the fact that memories also create feelings. Receives a message from a god that told him that he slayed a god and he doesnt even question it despite not remembering. He instantly uses magic that he received from a starter pack and kills a wolv and doesnt feel a thing. And were at the end of chapter 1.. Character Design? Odd look and being average and thats all thats said about the look of the character World Background? Only the name of the kingdom/ place hes at is mentioned.
What? I been Isekai'd With A Cliche Anime System!?
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First of all, you should try starting to adress feelings for example showing sadness, happiness and such things or the mc will feel like an unfeeling monster. 2nd of all, the pacing is way to fast. It was like he was jumping from one event to another without giving us time to start learning more about himself, the world or his thoughts about everyone (you can add feelings here for example). Also add events/ happenings that arent part of his missions as well or everything will feel cliche due to the fact that one important thing happens after another without pause (do not add too many of these only a handful). 3rd of all are the characteristics. Describe every important persons looks at least once but do not do it every time they appear or it will just be world filler.
Ero_sama:Yeah, I know, It's rough as of now. But I'm only just starting. If you have any tips, please send them my way. And also, about slaying God & Instantly being able to use magic, It will be addressed shortly In the story.image
You are also doing a mysterious history mc if the god slaying and etc will be explained? There should be a few hints dropped out throughout the story, or even one at the start (for example a memory for something unordinary in the first chapter)
Ero_sama:Yeah, I know, It's rough as of now. But I'm only just starting. If you have any tips, please send them my way. And also, about slaying God & Instantly being able to use magic, It will be addressed shortly In the story.image