Review Detail of TheNewRuler in I Hate Systems

I really liked the writing so far and this could definitely become a great nivel, just ine small critisism: Very miner spoiler: I wouldnt use the oerspective of the antagonist as often, especially the second time is very unnecessary, since we were tould what happend before and then you let us sit through 1,5 chapters that didnt really add anything, sonce everybody who reads this nivel is already going to be familiar with systems. Also i just dont want to follow an unlikable character for that long, I would focus mirr in the mc. Still, this has a lot of potential, keep it up :)