Review Detail of Zeroz7 in The Hidden Noble
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la premisa de la historia va bien pero hay varias cosas por mejorar: - la escritura no es muy buena, se entiende la idea pero la lectura no es fluida en general algunas cosas ni sentido tienen, en fin si pudiera mejorar la escritura ayudaría a la comprensión y mejoraría mucho la calidad de la historia -el sistema esta mu op, esto no es malo pero si el autor no controla un poco esto puede que la historia se arruine luego, es algo que suele pasar siempre que la trampa o poder es muy op, porque todo se vuelve demasiado fácil, termina siendo un cumplimiento de deseos, a menos que de eso sea la historia? dejando de lado esos 2 problemas la historia se ve buena aunque por el momento hay pocos caps entonces aun no hay una opinión clara
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Well, the writing part would not know how to tell you well because I am not an English speaker, but in general I read the novels translated by google and when it is well written the translation is normal, but here some parts you read and understand what it says but not Do you know what you meant there or do you just read something and you have to read everything to understand what he meant, when it is well written this does not usually happen, so this part is a bit vague but maybe you can see something in your writing? . the other is that when you make the mc in a story too op there is always the risk that it gets out of control and unless the story is a wish fulfillment where you do what you have always wanted, it is better to limit one way or another the power of the mc because in a normal story if everything is within your reach it is too easy and there is no achievement or it is entertaining to read because the gratification of leveling up or becoming more powerful and the difficulty (well if you understand that although it is a bit hypocritical that one normally wants the easy way, but it is the difficulty that moves human life), then I told you to be careful because the story may be damaged if you do not handle that part well in some cases stories, however, some authors know how to carry it (traducido :V)
CrownedBishops:in English
HI thank you for your honest reply, As said before. this is my first time writing. I would do my outmost best to make sure to be clear with my story Bishops
Zeroz7:Well, the writing part would not know how to tell you well because I am not an English speaker, but in general I read the novels translated by google and when it is well written the translation is normal, but here some parts you read and understand what it says but not Do you know what you meant there or do you just read something and you have to read everything to understand what he meant, when it is well written this does not usually happen, so this part is a bit vague but maybe you can see something in your writing? . the other is that when you make the mc in a story too op there is always the risk that it gets out of control and unless the story is a wish fulfillment where you do what you have always wanted, it is better to limit one way or another the power of the mc because in a normal story if everything is within your reach it is too easy and there is no achievement or it is entertaining to read because the gratification of leveling up or becoming more powerful and the difficulty (well if you understand that although it is a bit hypocritical that one normally wants the easy way, but it is the difficulty that moves human life), then I told you to be careful because the story may be damaged if you do not handle that part well in some cases stories, however, some authors know how to carry it (traducido :V)