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TimeBender
TimeBenderLv12yrTimeBender

I read until ~ch 20 and skimmed the rest. Romance takes way too much time and the author has some strange ideas about it. Over half the story is focused on it and the rest is the MC spending time with his family. There are a few chapters out of this formula, but all in all, it is boring and uneventful. The MC doesn't think at all and all of his 'reasons' for being strange are idiotic. His wishes are dumb and make for a bad story. Yes, he got a lot of power, but the god character imposed some superficial restrictions on them saying that they are too powerful, yet ignoring the other, far more powerful wishes. All in all the story isn't thought out. The MC has access to all power systems, yet he chooses Naruto and Harry Potter for most things. He could have just used some cultivation world power, where you can become a god after a year. This wish was far too broad and made the story pointless. I hoped that it could improve, but it didn't. Infinite possibilities bring huge plot holes and require lots of thinking to fix. And the author did none of that. I also read a few other comments and he doesn't respond to criticism well. How are you supposed to improve if you don't listen to others ideas? Don't you want to better yourself and improve? Dunno, that is just my opinion. Do whatever.

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No HP magic i dont knoe where you took it. i read your comment and it didnt give me anything specific to improve. plot holes are in any story you read. there arw also plotholes in naruto. I do listen to people that suggest something or critisize wirh actual explanation. All in all is up to you to read the story or not. if i were to write story about Fighting then you would be right , but it Is slice of life mainly . I dont see why you say it is wrong To write about something My story is about