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Review Detail of Taragorm in Eden’s Multiverse Journey

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Taragorm
TaragormLv11yrTaragorm

Being nice first the author gets better over time, the mc is likeable enough and the idea is good. However I honestly cannot give this a higher score the first world is a dog's breakfast needs a serious rewrite its all good that it gets better but the first two worlds are kinda from two of my favourite intellectual properties. So that already sours my opinion from the get go. The whole fanfic fundamentally makes zero sense what so ever. The mc is literally God why even bother world hoping for a harem when he can create one, world, women and all. The mc has the three big O,s the whole one above all package . Putting myself in the mc shoes if I gained all that power it would fundamentally change me yet the mc is no different from before his death. Being one above all kinda means he knows everything is everywhere and is everything being essentially above it all. so why should he be going to a world at all when he's already there. would of worked better going a creation angle. Writing is hard, writing a god as mc is really hard, antagonists are pointless, Mcs desires are a snap of the fingers away, the only way of showing conflict, character growth and interesting developments are with exploring the main characters mindset and the effects he has on the world around him as in Overlord which is an op character done right.

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Eden’s Multiverse Journey

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XIIXIV
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yeah i realized the problem of writing a character like this, i only did it for fun and now since people like it i decided to not drop it. after a vote it was also decided to not rewrite the beginning and just finish the novel up since it was the first one so i can move on to new and better ideas. Thanks for the review.

Taragorm
TaragormLv1Taragorm

I look forward to seeing what else you write in the future. For fun this is well written, feel mean for low review. been toying with the idea of attempting to write a god character myself each time I get notes down for him it doesn't feel right. Writing an op character is grim work you've done better than I can.

XIIXIV:yeah i realized the problem of writing a character like this, i only did it for fun and now since people like it i decided to not drop it. after a vote it was also decided to not rewrite the beginning and just finish the novel up since it was the first one so i can move on to new and better ideas. Thanks for the review.