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Review Detail of Domoora in The First Store System

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Domoora
DomooraLv1524dDomoora

I've read most of the story and it's cool for the most part but I Wouldn't recommend it. The author is a big fan of asides or tangents and this isn't bad and I don't think they are poorly written. However after 1000+ chapters it makes me feel a lot of these new characters or showing items or there side stories are pointless. Now there are some that do have the story and I have no issue but honestly after chapter 1000 I started skipping a lot of chapters because to me they weren't important to the plot at all. I still rate this story highly and it's interesting just frustrating to read. The author does a good job writing and you can feel their enthusiasm come through that's why I'm not criticizing the tangents. I think this novel also suffers from how many others react to the store but you can only see this too many times before it's just the same scene over and over. The author could probably work on that but it's not that bad! I haven't really talked about the story or characters but they are fun mostly i wish there were less characters that didn't matter but the MC and main characters are cool enough and the world and story is interesting. I'm probably going to drop reading this and if it completes check the ending for answers. The beginning is very interesting and if my review doesn't turn you off I'd say go for it. 4/5 from me.

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Thank you for the review and for reading the story this far. I understand your point about there being too many characters, but the story play along in a large area span. Some will be recurring, some will be forgotten, while some will be used in the last phase of the story. I have decided to write the book this way, so I will keep writing it. I am writing another book Cultivating Immortality with a Broken Pagoda. It is an Eastern Fantasy novel, and will not be as spread as this one, so if you want to give a try, please do.

Domoora
DomooraLv15Domoora

hey that's totally fair and I do think you're a good writer It just got a little much for me. I'll try and check out your other works