Review Detail of FlammableFire in Hadrian Peverell in Twilight

Read to chapter 33. It is more apt to call this a diary or journal, not a story. Most character/emotional development is glossed over or outright skipped, and never once (outside of a scant few snippets) does the writing actually draw you in and submerse you into a scene. Other than that, there are plenty of typos and missed spaces, but not anything close to terrible by Webnovel standards. To the author: I highly recommend going to Dean Wesley Smith’s blog and looking up what “Depth” is. Your novel is sorely lacking it.