Review Detail of ChikoPicoShounen in Harry Potter:The rise of Voldemort

A travesity to the world of writing. I only read a couple chapters, so I cannot guarantee it doesn't get better, but so far we have; A whiny author that begs for votes while also complaining about the criticism from others. A wack voldemort that is so drastically different (love, desire for family, etc.) that I wouldn't have guessed it was him from his behaviour at all. A manner of world building that feels like a toddler painting trees in rainbow colours cause it's pretty; random and without logical background. If, at least, this was all backed by good writing skill, I could at least continue reading. But there is no such skill here.