Review Detail of Dubois_Stewart in Martial Arts System

Copying my post from ch 12: Ayo, I really tried guys but the grammar is so bad I find myself putting together the sentences in my head. Great story premise, bad construction. Also, you can’t have the MC talking about leaving no witnesses then leaving witnesses. Show us he’s the smart, hardworking, cold blooded assassin you introduced him as instead of restating it every chapter. It makes it less believable. Wanted to leave this constructive criticism before I left the novel. Keep grinding Mr. Author! My summary of thoughts of the past 12 chapters: I think its possible to do cliche isekai stories well, which is why i still read them. I really wanted so badly for this to be one of those but there are a few glaring weaknesses Character design: It is reiterated that Ichiro was a man who devoted his entire life to martial arts, and was a contracted assassin for the government. That's it, no real fleshing out of his personality, except for stereotypical "smart, cold blooded, mature MC" He also has this strange hero complex where he acknowledges he's a killer, yet when he is forced to kill for the first time in this world he for some reason denies that he's a murderer? It doesn't make sense. When introducing side characters there's a way to introduce them to make the reader care about them. I don't care about any of these characters, nor does it seem like the author does either. We spend one chapter on his new family and besides his sister, i don't remember the parents. I mean, the father was introduced at the end of his school day and he was introduced like an afterthought "Oh yeah, I met my father for the first time and he felt like my father" And then we move on with the story. The world was also introduced like an afterthought. We get introduced to the setting during his history class, and the info dump is done in run on sentences. We also get no info on the school:is this the best one in the country? Why, if the world needs more martial artists is it that instead of being a martial arts school, the discipline is relegated to an afterschool club? Is there a reason behind this or was the school designed just to satisfy the obligatory academy arc in each novel? Story Development: More of the same from world background, it all felt kind of rushed and i feel like the author could've taken his time writing out the academy, his family, giving the reader a sense of Ichiros personality, and the introduction of the 'system'. In these kinds of stories, there always ends up being a reason behind the system being given:Do other people have it? Can Ichiro ask about that? We don't even know if his classmates can use it, it seems like we're supposed to infer that they can't Writing Quality: I could've looked past the rest of these issues if the grammar was at least passable but too many run on sentences, too much reiteration, and clunky sentences. All in all, this has potential, and i'd like it to reach that to it's fullest