Review Detail of InGlorious in Harry Potter : Arc of Embodiment ( Rewrite )

Let's be honest here... I lost my interest as soon as I read that he found Liquid Luck on some random Death Eaters and Aurors. Liquid Luck or Felix Felicis is one of hardest potion to brew. In HP books or the movies there is only one person who has the ability to brew that potion. Horace Slughorn and Liquid Luck is highly toxic for a someone so young... Even adults could only ingest a couple of drops. Liquid Luck is highly regulated by the ministry too and I understand that he might have found it on some random Death Eater because they don't follow laws but it's still absurd. Where did he get Liquid Luck from?? Even Ol Vodlie never got his hands on Liquid Luck or he would have taken over Britian without much difficulty and your timeline is pretty messed up. There is no way that Death Eaters were still operating while donning their Death Eater Regalia in the year of 1984. Voldie lost his body in 1981 and after that Death Eaters were either sentenced to Azkaban or the bribed their way out of Azkaban using Imperius Defense. Now if you have said that he had found Liquid Luck in the vaults of Pendragon or Fey then it would have been more logical than founding it on some random Death Eater or Auror. But the main problem of this story is something completely different. You don't explain things, in the first chapter you siad that he found secret base and whatever but how did he even know that?? Then how did he even nullify the tracking charms... You never explained that. You siad he used AOE but that doesn't work like that. Then how did he even train? The lack of details is the major put off in this story. If you are doing something in the story then explain it. Don't leave it hanging...