Review Detail of Sarah_Lawart in Harry Potter : Arc of Embodiment ( Rewrite )

Honestly, your writing is confusing, you don't explain the things that go on and it also makes the MC so op, it doesn't even make sense. The goblins would never make a deal without at least knowing where the money came from, and you never explained how the MC trained his powers, even though you made a training schedule, on top of that, you never explained exactly how the MC reincarnated and also tries to add things at each step, but without explaining anything leaving the story confused and without any cohesion.