Review Detail of 7chn4b in Ravens of Eternity

The story is interesting and I even like the Characters. Grammar is good as well. Unfortunately the plot development feels inconsistent with the world as it is painted. Recruits are killed during an exam against bots, when there is absolutely no need for them to die. A military base on Mars is attacked for hours on end without Reinforcement from anywhere while the whole planet is supposedly a major military hub. During the attack Recruits lead the defence instead of their Instructors etc.. Physics in space also makes no sense with a maximum speed dependent on the engine (below light speed). There could be reasons for all those things, but if there are, they are never explained. Essentially thinks happen for the story, but make no sense.