Review Detail of Ouroboros001 in Ancient Supreme Overlord

The syntax and formatting are almost as bad as MTL. I can't read it. Takes me right out of the story. Another thing I noticed is that instead of role-playing each character the writer makes it incredibly cliche. Young master cliche. It's just not very good. Keep at it, man. Get a development editor and some proofreaders. Use Google Docs and Grammarly.