Review Detail of Am_Potato_God in Thot Controlling System

While the story isnt high quality it seems like you actually care about it which i respect Hope you have fun writing Some suggestions to improve would be to read/ skim what you write and try to follow it yourself While doing that anytime you catch yourself trting to fill in some sort of blank in the story (like trust that comes out of nowhere when they run into eachother in the hallway) find a way to incorporate it into the text so the reader understands what you meant Tldr: write what needs to be written to explain to someone who has never read the story instead of writing what needs to be written to explain to yourself