Review Detail of DaoistjzyHx2 in Mafia King's Revenge Love Story

I know I shouldn't judge this too harshly but This is really cringe!! 😑😑 The story development was not spontaneous and the writing was passable. Too many sentences that are grammatically incorrect. I don't know if this is the author's first time writing but so far the story was passable or nuetral. Continue to write more! I hope my opinion will not stop you to continue with this story. Eventually, You'll get there!!