Review Detail of Akame_Zero in Rebirth of Primordial Emperor

I put 4, but it looks more like 1. More like a draft than a finished product. The story lacks structure, you need to be able to divide into paragraphs. In each paragraph, an idea or dialogue, some paragraphs should be connected in meaning, etc. a lot information is given in a simple mix. Especially in chapter 2, everything is merged into one paragraph, there are no divisions. I like the topic of the stories and the potential is good, but I think the author should radically work on presenting ideas and writing a plot. More like different scraps than a whole history. But all this requires experience, so I think over time the author himself will begin to notice errors and inconsistencies. The main thing is to keep writing