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Subaru_Uchimaki
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I was struggling whether to read this or not. Don't get me wrong the story is good, though a lot of scenarios reminds me of TNE. Like Emma and Ren train scene where Emma is unreasonable then Ren reminds her that she owes him one. Melissa is similar to Yoo yeonha as the provider and business partner of MC. Rachel and Amanda with being aloof. Elitist Jin Horton is like Shin Jonghak. And the scenario of Contractor of lust who is so handsome as well as leader of the club? Similarities aside, I like the idea of "last bastion of humanity" idea where they have to constantly fight wars with monsters or demons, having core cities as a final wall. I hope author would include military expeditions accident scenes or City being besieged by monsters scenes. Hoping a "Versatile Mage" development in regards to crisis against monsters. I also like how MC used a sword instead of being a range type it's really cool when he quick draws then heads rolls off and the main characters thinks he's hiding his strength. I also like that MC builds his own organization rather than joining one. This is just my prejudice but the only thing I hate is when the MC is portrayed thirsting for the girls having excuses like he's in a young body, raging hormones and such. And Popping a boner due to Donna? Yeah. I almost dropped it at that part. There's also sniffing the scent? It's a good thing i didn't find more vulgar acts in later chapters. That's the one thing I hate. MC can just look at their appearance objectively and subjectively like descriptions like "smile like blooming flower" etc. but it feels uncomfortable when MC sees them sexually and describing that he had a boner and the part being a virgin is unnecessary. While other aspects are good this personality is a no-no. I prefer writing style where the sexual aspect isn't described bluntly or better yet just subtle or non- existent. You can describe that MC never had relationships before like how in TNE where there's romance but does not necessarily describes the sexual aspect like being a virgin and whatnot, popping a boner. this kind of horny type reminds me of typical CN And JP trash characters. I do hope there's no scenario where donna using seductive arts to make everyone have a boner. It's good enough that she makes people blush. While people can argue that it makes it more realistic and mundane, as a MC with such a character it feels disgusting.

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Entrail_JI

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Subaru_Uchimaki
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Author could also just use the typical " nosebleed due to overheating" or being dazed when characters see a seductive character. It makes the vulgarity much more subtle.

Entrail_JI:Thank you for the review. I would like to clarify. The bone* part with Donna isn't because of his hormones, it's because of her seduction art which resulted in that happening. Had he not been affected he wouldn't have had a bone* After all, he is a G rank whilst she is an S rank. The effects of the art will cause him to be like that (plus it was just a small joke) Also, MC does not see the girls sexually. (reason being them only being around 16 years of age) Maybe Donna but that's once again because of her four-star manual. In fact, there is no romance until very later. He is actually quite indifferent to the girls if you read further.
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Thank you for the review. I would like to clarify. The bone* part with Donna isn't because of his hormones, it's because of her seduction art which resulted in that happening. Had he not been affected he wouldn't have had a bone* After all, he is a G rank whilst she is an S rank. The effects of the art will cause him to be like that (plus it was just a small joke) Also, MC does not see the girls sexually. (reason being them only being around 16 years of age) Maybe Donna but that's once again because of her four-star manual. In fact, there is no romance until very later. He is actually quite indifferent to the girls if you read further.

Entrail_JI
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mhh, but what's wrong with your little brother going up? It's such a normal thing that every teen experiences. ...and frankly speaking, for realism, this would be the most ideal choice as no one actually bleeds or falls into a daze when people see a seductive character. The only reasonable reaction is for their little brother to go up. I mean, that's what seductive things do. Although I do agree that it is vulgar, swear words are also vulgar in a way and they can be found in the novel. Though, if I see more complaints about it I'll change it. Anyhow, thank you for the feedback, I'll look out for any more complaints about this, and if the general consensus is to remove it, remove it I shall.

Subaru_Uchimaki:Author could also just use the typical " nosebleed due to overheating" or being dazed when characters see a seductive character. It makes the vulgarity much more subtle.