Review Detail of Erxian_ in Empty promises:HOPE

This story seems to be in a visual novel format... without the visual stuff. While there is descriptive stuff, there's a lot of confusing dialogue here and there that overwhelmed me completely. I think the author needs to work on structuring and formating. I recommend reading several basic novels such as "Harry Potter" or "Percy Jackson". Basic books, however, they can teach a lot about proper formatting, punctuation, and grammar. If the author manages to fix this, I think this story has potential.