Review Detail of Knight4Productions in The last heir of Dumbledore

The idea is neat but the development of the story makes no sense. Details to streamline the different scenes into a whole chapter are missing which makes the writing seem poorly planned. In chapter 1, the only well-thought out part is the reasoning behind the MC's appearance. I understand wanting to introduce the MC to other important characters but, story-wise it makes no sense. For example, why would the Head of the DMLE be interogating the MC who at that time is 1. ignorant of the existance of Magic & 2. an child ? After the MC is send to St. Mungo's - still ignorant of Magic in the eyes of the npc's and receives his Hogwart's Letter whereafter he meets Albus Dumbledore, I stopped reading. I recommand the author to rewrite some parts, so it at least makes some sense...