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Review Detail of Mr_Imagination in My Goddess Mother Gave Me A SYSTEM AND KICKED ME OUT

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Mr_Imagination
Mr_ImaginationLv22yrMr_Imagination

The story and plot is good but you are trying too hard to write the words. The grammar becomes bad because you are trying to make some english shenanigans. You should've make it simple and make the words have an easier flow and easier to read.The system's words also suck because it's capital letters. "Hey system", silver called. [Bla Bla Bla] Should've make it look like this so it would look nicer. 5 star for everything except for writing style with 1 star

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My Goddess Mother Gave Me A SYSTEM AND KICKED ME OUT

Nii07

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Nii07
Nii07AuthorNii07

Thank you for the review I'll take your critique into consideration while writing my story

Crycks
CrycksLv14Crycks

+1 to that review. i drop it because i just dont want to read full chapters of info data written in MAJ, that’s just borring. I prefer when MC learn slowly or when in need what the things are. just my opinion, no bad review here.

Nii07:Thank you for the review I'll take your critique into consideration while writing my story
Tommyshelby
TommyshelbyLv13Tommyshelby

do you need an editor or proofreader

Nii07:Thank you for the review I'll take your critique into consideration while writing my story
Nii07
Nii07AuthorNii07

I would like one but I currently can't afford one.

Tommyshelby:do you need an editor or proofreader
Tommyshelby
TommyshelbyLv13Tommyshelby

wait hold on am cheaper you can be paying me 4 dollars per ch

Nii07:I would like one but I currently can't afford one.
Shirubafokkusuhime
ShirubafokkusuhimeLv14Shirubafokkusuhime

um, excuse me sir

Nii07:Thank you for the review I'll take your critique into consideration while writing my story
Nii07
Nii07AuthorNii07

I don't charge my readers to read this content so I don't have any extra money to spend on a proofreader

Tommyshelby:wait hold on am cheaper you can be paying me 4 dollars per ch
Tommyshelby
TommyshelbyLv13Tommyshelby

oh okay thanks no problem

Nii07:I don't charge my readers to read this content so I don't have any extra money to spend on a proofreader