The story and plot is good but you are trying too hard to write the words. The grammar becomes bad because you are trying to make some english shenanigans. You should've make it simple and make the words have an easier flow and easier to read.The system's words also suck because it's capital letters. "Hey system", silver called. [Bla Bla Bla] Should've make it look like this so it would look nicer. 5 star for everything except for writing style with 1 star
Nii07
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LIKE+1 to that review. i drop it because i just dont want to read full chapters of info data written in MAJ, that’s just borring. I prefer when MC learn slowly or when in need what the things are. just my opinion, no bad review here.
Nii07:Thank you for the review I'll take your critique into consideration while writing my story
Nii07:Thank you for the review I'll take your critique into consideration while writing my story
Nii07:Thank you for the review I'll take your critique into consideration while writing my story
I don't charge my readers to read this content so I don't have any extra money to spend on a proofreader
Tommyshelby:wait hold on am cheaper you can be paying me 4 dollars per ch
Nii07:I don't charge my readers to read this content so I don't have any extra money to spend on a proofreader