Review Detail of kidd17 in Undead Nation

i like the unique tragedy that you put in your story but, I don't like the way you put the place name and date. in my opinion you should put that naturally like this : Unknown Place, New Delhi, India Saturday, August 27th, 2021 and you should have a little work on dialogues? It's better when you put them into sentences. But overall it's good. (it's my opinion)