Review Detail of dead_oop in I tried to kill a computer mouse

You really need to read more novels and write more, so gradually you will improve. Don't be demotivated by this rating cause I will try to assist you to take the best out in you. The writing has so many typos, not good punctuation, paragraph changing, and many more errors. You haven't described her feeling, the surrounding, and her movement properly. The only thing that's good is updates in the chapter there are just 3 chapters but I am sure the author will keep up with updates. The title was so interesting that it caught my attention, the plot was pretty good and I see the potential. But some parts I had to read thrice to understand it. And character design is terrible, she acts like a different person in every chapter. So I suggest you write about your character somewhere note down her flaws, her fear, what she is good at, her skill and everything. Also, describe how female lead looks properly. You should start reading more novels to under how to write. You definitely have the imagination but you don't know how to express it in words. I will keep checking on this book to see how much you improved, Best of luck!