Review Detail of Lelouch_Kaname in A Woman With Vision {Arthur Laywin}

Grammar, characters, and the background are all top-notch...you just need better story development cuz yours is too slow or too fast while it should be moderate at most times but you can speed it up at specific parts...well that was what I found worth mentioning in this 6 chapter sample but another minor thing that needs immediate changing is that you can just take away that first long and arduous part about copyrights or whatever and put it only once in the synopsis instead of sticking it to the start of each and every chapter...