Review Detail of Luffy_For_The_Win in Pirate’s Brood Order

let me start with a simple review. based on what little I have read, the story seems very well fleshed out with a lot of good original ideas that aren't found in many other books. however there is a glaring flaw: DONT MAKE A BOOK SO COMPLICATED WITHOUT SOMEONE EDITING IT!!!!!!!!!!! it was hard enough understanding what you meant in one sentence much less the entire chapter. PLEASE GET AN EDITOR FOR GODS SAKE. I'm sorry but I will have to drop your book because of how completely incomprehensible your English is. it seemed like a good story with well written sentences before it was translated if it was. if not, it seemed like you had a mess up once every five words. the sentences didn't fit together either so the story became disjointed and unreadable. Sorry but I'm out.