Review Detail of King_Kay in [Sorry, it’s been DROPPED] The Raven (Kuroko no Basket FF)
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Youre doing good but youre oc and his personality is getting out of hand i almost dropped this tbh i understand wanting to be good and beinG dissapoInteD in the goM but youve been making youre oc look more villainish than anything he supposed to love basketball and be the best at it no one is supposed to beat him but youre route Makes it look like he supposed To be super undefeatable now habe a awfully shit personality then make Kagami and Kuroko thrash him in hs how is that any different than the anime because out of all the characters in knb youre oC reminds me of nash the moSt and that isnt Good maybe relax his personality make him laiDBack nd only use 25% on the coUrt tIIll Highschool but even then when The highschool arc comes he still needs to be the strongest authors think that always haVing a winning mc is bad but No thats what we wanna see Just play out The game tell Us how He got those poinTs i wanna ReAd the crossover dunks and zone all of it but i dont want to read aBout a loser honEstly
[Sorry, it’s been DROPPED] The Raven (Kuroko no Basket FF)
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Ya i can’t deny that, even ive thought i might be going to far sometimes. However some people are just completely different when they are on the field/court, and that’s kind of how im writing him i guess. I won’t lie I’m an “emotional” writer i guess would be the right word, so how i right MC may change depending on my mood at that particular time. I understand how that can be off putting. sorry for that. However this is the longest ive went without dropping a novel, so i dont want to stop it to re write it or anything. Hope you enjoyed what you have read so far, and if you do drop thanks for reading up to this point.
Not saying drop it it is good but The latest chapter showed us 2 things thAtvis the oc can still get stronger and has more moves up his sleeve and The next is his personality is beCominG more twisted to the point where His daD noticEs thats a problem unless youre going for the whole problematic mental issues mc then youre on the right path but i dont think you are i think he just needs to be a bit more laId back like he snaps on riko for tEaring a picture lIke i get it but it feels like yhat will Be a major issue in this fanfic down The line still Keep up the good wOrk tho