Review Detail of Kiiara in His Only Love

This is a great story and I can see potential in it. The writing is also nice. It's just there's too much 'telling' rather than 'showing'. Telling through the dialogues. I would suggest for you to describe more on the setting and the atmosphere. A story esp in the form of novel, it needs to evoke an image in our head through just writings. Therefore, it is important for u to help us readers understand the whole situation by showing more, narrate the situation, is it crowded? where r they right now? What's going on? What r they drinking? Even the character's gesture sometimes can already imply sth rather than using dialogues to achieve this goal. Anyway, I hope I explain it well hehehe...never been good at explaining this kind of thing. Overall, the story definitely has potential. So, keep it up, Author! Good luck! <3