Review Detail of WandererMonk in Seeking the Pinnacle of Magic
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Ah man, whatta journey Now where do I start? The characters - Cyril really loves his job, there's this curiousity - this desire - this thirst, in him for knowledge which makes it really interesting. But, the emperor/founder, is my fav character for some reason I dunno why, and I felt sad that he was not one of the main charcters. IMO, this would have been a great story with two Two Leads. The worldbuilding - not very much is known yet but the way author describes it, and adds it at appropriate time, makes it interesting. Really interested to see this world developed in later stages. The author has a very simplistic art style without the use of very complex words which doesn't break the immersiona and make the read smooth. Though the measurement units were kinda off...also, sometimes, it feels a big dragging but really good overall. Stability of updates is a major issue - 13 chaps in 10 months - but author said it's more of a hobby for him. Overall, a really great read, and already much much better than all the other ' I died and reincarnated as this xxx with this system' stories.. keep up the good work author
Seeking the Pinnacle of Magic
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oh, I got it... You're indeed right... it may not make sense to use precise units in descriptions... After all, it's impossible to let the readers visualize what I'm imagining... It's better to let their imagination fill the gaps As for the problems with the cave arcs, I've indeed felt like there is something wrong... Maybe because there isn't any real character? The conversations with the AI were as simple as I could make them and to be honest they make perfect sense to me but it may actually be like this because, after all, I'm the all-mighty and omniscient author... I will need to gather more feedbacks to pinpoint the problems and fix them... Anyway, thanks for the clarification, I think we can agree there is nothing better than understanding how to improve when writing a story
WandererMonk:maybe it's because the MC has a chip of some sorts, but whenever the measurements units are mentioned - especially since they are exact measurement units - they kind of broke my immersion (this can be just a me case too and not same for other readers) I felt his cave arc a bit draggy for some reason and had to read it fast, i can't pinpoint exactly what's the issue, but it felt a little sluggish to me apart from that, the conversation with the ai are a bit hard to follow through sometimes, maybe because they are terms I am unfamiliar with. other than that, its a free smooth flowing story and you won't notice when a chap ended
Thanks for your honest opinion, I definitely appreciate it but more importantly I'm curious about the constructive critiques. First, the measurement units, can you please elaborate on it? I'm not sure where is the problem or how to fix it... Same for the feeling of a big dragging (This time I have no idea of that sentence's meaning) Can you elaborate a little so that I can understand how to improve? thanks
maybe it's because the MC has a chip of some sorts, but whenever the measurements units are mentioned - especially since they are exact measurement units - they kind of broke my immersion (this can be just a me case too and not same for other readers) I felt his cave arc a bit draggy for some reason and had to read it fast, i can't pinpoint exactly what's the issue, but it felt a little sluggish to me apart from that, the conversation with the ai are a bit hard to follow through sometimes, maybe because they are terms I am unfamiliar with. other than that, its a free smooth flowing story and you won't notice when a chap ended
DNaCat_W:Thanks for your honest opinion, I definitely appreciate it but more importantly I'm curious about the constructive critiques. First, the measurement units, can you please elaborate on it? I'm not sure where is the problem or how to fix it... Same for the feeling of a big dragging (This time I have no idea of that sentence's meaning) Can you elaborate a little so that I can understand how to improve? thanks