Review Detail of Zach_Herold in The White Faced Demon

I wanted the demon to have more of a look than the main character did that way the readwr could easily develop a better idea of what the demon looked like. I think my writing was pretty good all things considered. Its a short story this is as far as it will ever be updated. I also think i did a good jkb kn story development although I do think the horror parts were kind of sudden almost random. This is the second part to a memoir twist collection I am creating the first part is a book called “The Love Thats Everlasting”