Review Detail of PGODofficial in The Legend Of Nobody(Spirity)

This is a good attempt, and I can tell that there is effort in telling the story of transmigration. With better proofreading to catch tense changes, grammatical mistakes and better pacing, this could well be a good story that can capture the attention and hearts of readers. Don't give up! I have left some tips in the comments for you to consider. Good luck!