Review Detail of JohnPlume in In A Cultivation World With An Entertainment Park -(Moved to new link)

I want to start off by saying I love the concept. Some of my favorite novels on this site are stories that bring pop culture to another world like the Black Tech Internet Cafe System or Bringing Culture to Another World. Also, I loved some of the pop culture choices that the author chose to utilize. I am a huge fan of One Piece and you never see western cartoons like the Jetsons referenced. However, while I loved the concept of the story, I felt like execution of the story could have been greatly improved. It felt like the author was just rushing to add as much stuff/new features in the park as possible in an effort to keep the audience's attention rather than properly exploring any one feature with any depth. Take the Rosie Robots as an example. They were first added in the very beginning of the story when the park is first created. I thought they would be a great comedic character. Not only would they have a funny way to handle troublemakers, they were described as being sassy like the original which made me look forward to other funny interactions between the Rosies and the other characters. However, Rosie was never properly developed. Rosie never took any actions or even spoke until chapter 89 when she finally handled her first troublemakers. And after those troublemakers were handled, she has not done anything since. Furthermore, we have never seen her act sassy like her original counterpart. You could have replaced rosey with a generic robot/puppet and had the same result. You had the potential for a great character completely go to waste because you did not explore it. Some features I still don't fully get like the mission center. Can independent people post missions or are they all connected/posted by the park? What does the park even do with the items collected for missions like the fire Chu Che collected in the demonstration mission? Besides cleaning, what other missions are available to the general townsfolk (after all with the installation of self cleaning roads some of the cleaning jobs would have been eliminated)? The simulation pavilion is a similar as I don't really get how that is different from the virtual reality video games or what are the options for that feature since you are only now exploring the Snakes and Ladders option despite mentioning it many chapters ago. These are all things that I could have learned fairly early on, but because the author did not spend tons of time to explore the concept, I still don't fully get these features. In all honesty, I feel like if the author simply used a quarter of the features he had in the story and focused on exploring on each feature in greater depth from various different perspectives, the story would have been more well rounded and engaging. Take One Piece for example, all we saw was that people thought the first episode was interesting. However, readers don't read this kind of story to just see characters mindlessly say a list of pop culture items are cool. Instead, they want to see how pop culture is viewed from vastly different perspectives and how they would affect/impact different environments. When you introduced One Piece, all everyone says is that the first episode is interesting and that everyone calls Luffy, Senior Luffy. However, would everyone call him that? After all, Luffy is a young, dumb, lighthearted teen? Would serious people fixated on decorum and who are hundreds of years old really call him Senior? Plus for the honorable sects, what would they feel about rooting for a pirate? Would they feel like it is dishonorable, would they not care since cultivators rob people as well for cultivation resources (which is a problem in of itself/something to explore), or do they learn to recognize people more for their actions rather than their labels through this story? What new moves can people who have similar yet still distinctly different fighting styles create (ex. swordfighters who don't want to use three swords or martial artists who don't have luffy's stretchiness)? What do the people think about seeing a story happen on the ocean? Is there an ocean in the lower realm? Have many people in that region seen the ocean (especially more local individuals that have not travelled far)? Are people now inspired to sail? Can the design of the sailing ships serve as inspiration and are easier to copy than modern technology? Having an entire arc focused on multiple One Piece episodes and from various perspectives would allow the audience to learn a lot more about the world in general. I also have questions about X-Men. Why were the audience able to sense qi from the characters and learn their special abilities? After all, the X-Men did not really learn their skills, they were born with them. They are genetic mutations, closer to inborn natural features like a hair color or an extra hand rather than skills naturally learned. As such, how were they able to mimic them? If the X-Men and other superheroes like the Hulk (which is always attributed to radiation) have Qi, it begs the question, what even is Qi? And no one found it strange that Iron Man was so strong even without any Qi or did they somehow think the electricity/power source of the suits were the same thing as Qi? Also, to me, it would have been cooler for characters to put in effort towards learning skills instead of automatically being granted skills by simply reading. Even if it is just adapting the skills they already had in new ways (ex. the sword control skill could be expanded to Magneto's metal control) to mimic the skills of characters and work for those skills instead of being handed on a silver platter. These are all things you can explore. The point is not to just say different features or properties are cool. If that was all readers wanted than they would read a list rather than a novel. The point is to use those pop culture properties to explore various characters, see different ways they can influence people, and the world in general. You have plenty of stuff already in the novel which deserves more exploration. Don't feel like you need to add something new every three chapters. Also, be more careful with the spelling. It seems like every chapter there is at least one word that rhymes with the word you actually meant. When you write the word "shower" instead of "cower" you know things are bad. If the author takes their time more, I feel like the story would be a lot better.