Резкие переходы с первого на третье лицо. Отвратительно написано, как пример в первой же главе абзац от лица автора(повествования): I mean, considering how serious the accident was, and his age, he should have passed out on the spot, or minutes ago. But he was still conscious, even though he was currently struggling to stay conscious to await the medics
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