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This book is a common trope book with a dense harem protagonist even though the author is self aware. They make jokes about it but it doesnt make it any less cliche, it just makes it so people get distracted by the fact rhe author is “acknowledging” the problem. The main character has some interesting personality characteristics, however his notable early fright agains monsters is not written that well. It is shown and expanded on for around 10 chapters total before being swept under the rug. I dont dislike characters that have traumatic issues, I think this author’s “Mob” story is a great example of this. I just think that it is pretty bad when an entire character trait is demolished like that. Another issue i have is with character interactions, mainly the intellect of side characters. A prominent case is the character of Krystal’s boyfriend. Keep in mind this may not be true, im writing this right adrer the boyfriend threatened the MC’s family. Anyways, the problem I have is with how stupid this makes Krystal’s character out to be, seeming to make her super ignorant and oblivious. This also somewhat translates to other characters.

[ONLY ON WATTPAD] My Daily Life With A Monster Harem

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Thanks for the review. With this being my first story, I definitely learned a lot through this and MOB, so this story absolutely has these flaws, but thank you for helping to bring them to my attention. As always, I’ll make sure I improve. :)

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Hey thats why i did it, I think you have great potential and i love your otger stories.

UnknownFate25:Thanks for the review. With this being my first story, I definitely learned a lot through this and MOB, so this story absolutely has these flaws, but thank you for helping to bring them to my attention. As always, I’ll make sure I improve. :)