Review Detail of Hog980 in sgrggeg

The story is a good idea but it feels as if isn’t being pulled off in the best way. The reasoning has to do mainly with the character interaction and occasional grammar issues. The characters, specifically the MC feel almost mechanical in their interactions. One example is when he interacts with other kids there was dialogue in which he offered candy and then thought something along the lines of “this has shown to work well when inducing social interactions while in school.” The only other thing is the constantly changing gender and name of his owl. Outside of that it is a great story that I have enjoyed reading.